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Aug
20
2011
My Personal Statement
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As some of you may or may not know, I am applying to medical school this year. I decided to rewrite my personal statement, and I am (maybe foolishly) posting it here for everyone to read and constructively criticize.

When faced with a tough decision, some people will logically weigh out the pros and cons of each, some might consult friends and family and some people will just follow their gut. In September of 2008 I had just received my MCAT scores and had to decide if and where I wanted to apply to medical school. All my classmates were applying, my family was eager to see me in medical school and I didn’t have any job prospects lined up if I didn’t continue school. To everybody around me it seemed like a logical decision to go to medical school, but I knew in my heart that I was burnt out of school. I entered a big university as a sheltered 16 year old boy, and spent more of my undergrad caring about having the fun I missed out on in my youth than caring about my studies. I knew med school was much more important than undergrad, and I didn’t want to not give it my all.

So I decided to take a year off. I figured that I would find some boring lab job to work at for a year then apply. Instead I found online poker over winter break my senior year. I quickly discovered that it was a fast paced logic game (and one that I was good at) and that the professionals were very similar to day traders on wall street and nothing like the degenerates at race tracks that I pictured them to be. With the prospect of making $100k+/yr by playing a game on my computer, I passed on the boring lab job after my senior year. My family was horrified, thinking that their son had thrown away his promising medical career and was destined to be a degenerate lowlife.

It ended up being the best decision of my life. Over the past two years, I have lived in places like Vancouver, Las Vegas and La Paz, Mexico. Since I could work from anywhere, I would spontaneously take trips to visit friends on less than 48 hours notice. I once decided to stay in Mexico for a week with six strangers from around the world. I ended up making six lifelong friends. I learned how to cook, how to speak Spanish and how to snowboard. I am the two year defending champion of the World Series of Roshambo. I had more than enough fun to make up for being sheltered at 16. I met a myriad of intelligent people that changed the way I think for the better. I learned how to view the world in a much more logical manner and I am better at solving tough problems quickly and effectively.

I also accepted an offer to help write a book on poker. Its currently available via tablet and will be released in hard copy form in October. I also got involved in a charity that focuses on raising money from poker players for the Prevent Cancer Foundation. This summer we raised over $125,000. I became involved in a few different business ventures, some of which failed miserably but all of which I learned a lot from. I am currently really interested in business and investing, and because of my poker background I am picking things up very quickly.

Two years later I find myself much more interested in medicine. I find myself on wikipedia at least once a week looking up something related to medicine/science, and its not because I have to but because I am genuinely curious. Now that medicine isn’t a goal crammed down my throat by others, it has become something that I want to do for myself. I hate the fact that with poker I don’t add value to anybody’s life. Nobody ever goes home thankful that I did my job. In poker there is no end goal, no grand achievement to work towards. I could be the best player ever and revolutionize the way the game is played and it wouldn’t greatly affect anyone’s life. There are only financial goals, and reaching them, no matter how high, never leads to any lasting satisfaction.

All of my friends from back home are in grad school or working and they constantly tell me how great I have it. I make money playing a game and have all the freedom in the world. While poker has blessed me with so many great opportunities, I realize that I would never want to make a career out of it. Two years later, I am applying to medical school as a much more well rounded human being who cant wait to dive into this next phase of my life. That’s something I couldn’t say right after I finished undergrad. As Robert Frost said, “Two roads diverged in a wood, and I-, I took the one less traveled by, And that has made all the difference”

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08-20-2011
Beans is offline Beans
Cool story bro!
08-20-2011
IcarusJam is offline IcarusJam
Gl at med school man, stay in touch
08-20-2011
lostinthesaus is offline lostinthesaus
Quote:
and I didn’t want to not give it my all.
should change to: I wanted to give it my all - or - I didn't want to half-ass it (or something like that)
08-20-2011
LT22 is offline LT22
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saus is correct there, double negative

GL with the application process
08-20-2011
amurophil is offline amurophil
Quote:
should change to: I wanted to give it my all - or - I didn't want to half-ass it (or something like that)
+1 for putting "half-ass" in your personal statement. that would be bad ass
08-20-2011
ImThaGrandMaster is offline ImThaGrandMaster
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Glad to have been part of the journey. I can relate to a lot of the stuff you wrote about. Whenever you can use the word myriad in a personal statement, ya do it. Good luck kid!
08-20-2011
LT22 is offline LT22
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wait, is this actually your personal statement or was this a cliff notes version of what you're considering saying?
08-20-2011
Vitas23 is offline Vitas23
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toocrispy future gynecologist?
08-20-2011
grogheadflow is offline grogheadflow
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I like it
08-21-2011
LMFAOhaha is offline LMFAOhaha
you're going to revolve your personal statement around poker?
08-21-2011
preflopjitters is offline preflopjitters
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Solid. The Frost quote is used a lot, and I would just leave it out. Also, the sentence before that seems like an unnecessary look backward. I think the ending should be: "Two years later, I am applying to medical school as a much more well rounded human being who cant wait to dive into this next phase of my life." And just leave it at that.
08-21-2011
The_End is offline The_End
you add value to my life, austin
08-21-2011
SlowHabit is online now SlowHabit
Essay doesn't scream "I'm a f'ing superstar. Any of your student who meet me will go home and tell their friends/families about me because I'm that awesome/unique. You'll be a moron not to accept me. 100% No-Risk Satisfaction Guarantee."

Also, I would remove "Nobody ever goes home thankful that I did my job." It presents a selfish image of why you want to be a doctor. You want to be a doctor because you want to help people. You want to help a broke ass person without insurance/money when he has a health problem. At least those are the reasons why I think someone should be a doctor. Because if it's for fame and money, being a doctor is definitely not an optimal route for someone with your intelligence.

Lastly, let those morons at the admin office know that YOU ARE A SUPER DUPER F'ING STAR. SO ACT LIKE ONE! WRITE LIKE ONE! WITH CLASS AND HUMILITY OF COURSE.
08-21-2011
toocrispy is offline toocrispy
@lt22 yep this is it. Im pretty much at the maximum amt of words as well

@lmfao the last two years of my life have kinda revolved around poker. It only makes sense to write about it in my personal statement. It also explains the two year gap in my resume

@ everybody else: thank you. your kindness is all very encouraging

@tri any advice on how to write like a superstar? any key phrases I should throw in there?
08-21-2011
LT22 is offline LT22
Updated 08-21-2011 at 07:24 PM by LT22
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twice you reference boring lab job, this makes you look like an asshole IMO. I believe Wall Street should be capitalized.

2x defending champ of World Series of Roshambo <---nobody knows what the fuck this is

"I learned how to view the world in a much more logical manner and I am better at solving tough problems quickly and effectively." <-------I was taught by one of my teachers to not use fillers such as "much." Just say "more logical manner" and skip "much"

"Its currently available via tablet" <----It's, not Its

"very quickly" <---quickly, skip very

"Two years later I find myself much more interested in medicine" <-----skip "much", "I find myself more interested in medicine than I was two years ago."

Wikipedia, delete any and all references to Wikipedia, NEVER EVER EVER say that word in a professional manner. Mention journal articles/databases and you are golden.

the sentences including crammed down my throat and those that follow seem poorly structured

"no matter how high, never leads to any lasting satisfaction." <-----never led me

"I realize that I would never want to make a career out of it." "I now realize I do not want to pursue poker as a career."

"much more well rounded human being" <-------again delete "much".....well-rounded

can't not cant


Suggestions: Your writing needs a lot of work. Find a qualified person to help you revise your work. Also, there seems to be too much about poker and not enough about why you think medicine is awesome. Another thing, they might find it far fetched that you went from feeling medical school was crammed down your throat to be your passion in life just 2 yrs later. Make sure you are able to discuss in writing and in interviews why you want to become a doctor even though the thought of it disgusted you only 2 yrs ago.
08-21-2011
Robin_Ripper is online now Robin_Ripper
That LT22 guy has some good suggestions, GL in medical school!
08-21-2011
SlowHabit is online now SlowHabit
LT22 offers great suggestions.

As for writing like a superstar, remember those posts on 2p2 where high-stakes players said that to excel at poker, you need to think, breathe, and eat poker 24/7 and they still can't get enough of poker. They want to be the best. They need to be the best. Their pride is on the line. It's not about the money, it's for the love of the game. It's the competition. You can feel their passion and energy off the 2p2 posts.

Now replace poker with medicine and show me why you have the potential/hunger to be a high-stakes doctor. Reading wikipedia once a week and being genuine interested in medicine is like a micro-stakes friend reading 2p2 at least once a week, win a few Sit n Gos, and think he's ready to play high-stakes poker.
08-23-2011
LMFAOhaha is offline LMFAOhaha
Hey Crispy, thought I'd share this with you:

http://forumserver.twoplustwo.com/67...itive-1042489/

Coming from another pre-med student, I'd still have to stick with my first response and say not to revolve your entire statement around poker. Either way, it's your choice, just trying to help.
08-24-2011
IcarusJam is offline IcarusJam
Read "How to pitch anything" it's worth it, a lot of what you're writing is the ability to "sell" yourself. I'm in the middle of it and i think you'd love it and it'd be very applicable for your application
08-24-2011
robbyd86 is offline robbyd86
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^^^ i just ordered that book, it looks pretty interesting
 
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